😦 Bakso was chosen by 60% of students, Martabak by 20%, Siomay by 15%, and only 5% chose Other.
OK the problem here is that ‘other’ is rarely used as a noun. Generally it is used as a noun modifier: “other people”, “other things”, etc. In the above example, what is the noun that is being modified by ‘other’? Well, all of the items in the chart belong to a class, or group, and the name of that group is usually given as a label on the chart. In any case we know that Bakso, Martabak, and Siomay are all different kinds of Asian fast food, so we can write:
🙂 Bakso was chosen by 60% of students, Martabak by 20%, Siomay by 15%, and only 5% chose other kinds of Asian fast food.
‘Other’ is used as a noun in sociology, psychology and anthropology to identify and possibly explain ‘something different from us’, either as individuals or as a society. In these contexts there is a related concept: ‘otherness’.
In this post we’ll do two things. First, you will read a text and complete (draw) a bar chart based on the text. Next we’ll think about the use of ‘stood at’ in this kind of text, which is very similar to the writing you do in IELTS Task 1.
Reading (and drawing!)
- Copy this chart to a piece of paper:
- Read this article. As you read, complete the bar chart on your paper.
- Check your completed chart against mine.
Now let’s notice how the writer uses ‘stood at’:
- The time frame in the ‘stood at’ phrase is past and finished.
- The number being described in the ‘stood at’ phrase (in this case the price of Freddos) remained the same for a significant period of time (in this case 3 years).
- The number is represented as a number (and not, for example, as a percentage).
- The number is subject to some kind of change throughout the period.
- The following structure is applied: subject + stood at + number + past time expression
Note that the time expression can also appear at the beginning:
past time expression + subject + stood at + number
In IELTS Task 1 writing candidates are often required to make future predictions based on data in graphs, tables, and charts.
This can be an opportunity to display some sophisticated grammar, in particular the future perfect tense!
In a previous post I showed you how to use a phrase beginning by + time expression to build a sentence using past perfect tense. In fact we can take the same approach with other perfect tenses:
In this example we can say:
By 2020, sales of all devices will have increased.
Here I used the structure:
by + future time expression + subject + will + have + V3
We can then add other information in the usual manner using will for prediction:
By 2020, sales of all devices will have increased. Sales of the PS4 will be double sales for the Xbox One, which will in turn be three times sales for the Wii U.
Future perfect is very rarely used by native speakers because there are very few opportunities to use it! This is one of the reasons why future perfect, and indeed the other ‘perfect’ tenses, helps to increase your IELTS score for grammar in both writing and speaking.
Pay careful attention to the structure of future perfect and good luck with your future predictions in IELTS task 1!
😦 In 2015 sales of all 3 types of fast food increased dramatically.
This is a common error. Unfortunately there is no information about change IN 2015, only FROM 2005 TO 2015:
🙂 Between 2005 and 2015 sales of all 3 types of fast food increased dramatically.
If you are not specific about the time frame then your reporting of data will be inaccurate and you will receive a low score in IELTS for Task Achievement.
Before you write, decide exactly when the change happened and design a suitable time expression. These are the most commonly used:
- from time 1 to time 2
- between time 1 and time 2
😦 Women having a first child was low in both years (1995 and 2005).
Women was low(?!) Here we have some subject / verb disagreement, and so I’m guessing that it was actually a different singular countable noun that was low, and not ‘women’!
🙂 The percentage of women having a first child was low in both years (1995 and 2005).
Your opening theme was ‘women’. If the women you mention were indeed low then this could mean several things (click for captions):
When you’re describing numbers, you must describe numbers. Remember that numbers are represented by statistics words: number, amount, percentage,rate, ratio, etc. If you do not use one of these words then your writing becomes very difficult to follow, and obviously this affects your IELTS score.
😦 The graph illustrates information about the results of a poll of theatregoers regarding disturbances during theatre performances. In general the 4 most disturbing problems are coughing, rustling sweet papers, whispering and arriving late. Their percentages stand at above 50%.
Thanks to the context setting at the start of the essay, I can see that ‘50%’ means “50% of the theatregoers who took part in the poll.” But it’s not immediately obvious and I had to read the opening a second time to make sure I understood what you meant. If a text is difficult to understand then it will receive a low score in IELTS for coherence and cohesion. In the example above it can also affect your score for task achievement, because you don’t really say anything meaningful about ‘50%’. (See IELTS Task 1 Writing band descriptors)
A good strategy to introduce and develop percentages in IELTS Task 1 can be seen in this extract from an article in The Economist (analysis below):
What is ‘good’ about this reporting of percentages?
 The first percentage is expressed using the following pattern:
x% + of + noun (‘male characters’) + verb (‘were seen dressed..’)
Notice that the reader knows exactly what is meant by ‘male characters‘ thanks to the clear context setting of the opening sentence. Setting a context like this makes your writing coherent. When you use this structure you explicitly state the ‘whole’ – in this case ‘male characters’.
 The second percentage obviously also applies to ‘male characters’, and so there is no need to repeat ‘..of male characters’.
 ‘Those figures’ signals back to the previous two percentages, which we understand refer to ‘male characters’. Notice the structure:
past time expression (‘In 2014’) + subject (‘those figures’) + ‘stood at‘ + x%
 ..follows the structure:
x% + of + noun (‘male characters’)
 ..follows the structure:
x% + of + noun (‘female characters’).
We’re not surprised to read ‘female characters’ because this new context was set in the opening sentence of the paragraph. Again, this context setting makes your writing both cohesive and coherent since you explicitly state the whole (now ‘female characters’).
Whatever you do..
Make sure your first mention of a percentage includes an explicit reference to the whole:
x% + of + noun (the whole)
Would anybody like to try and re-write the text about theatregoers to make the ‘50%’ figure mean what it’s supposed to mean? Answers in comments below! 🙂
PS. Another example of what I’m talking about just came to my attention:
😦 AAS students which have just about 37% students, submit assignments on time.
Although the grammar is messy, you seem to be saying that AAS students are not completely AAS students – 63% of each AAS student is not an AAS student!?
Perhaps you mean:
🙂 AAS students, who represent just about 37% of all students, submit assignments on time.
You are much more likely to make sense if you construct a noun phrase in which your percentage number is followed by ‘of’:
x% + of + ‘the whole’(???) + verb + etc.
Make sure you state the ‘whole’ explicitly. For example if you are discussing male and female representation among students, then the ‘whole’ is students. If you want to say that 50% of students are female, do not write 50% of females are students. For a more detailed look at what I mean by the ‘whole’, take a look at my post Don’t forget the whole.
Use this structure with the first two or three numbers that apply to each new theme that you introduce and your reader will understand what the numbers refer to. You will also receive a good score in IELTS in all four criteria.