The percentage (raised/rose)

ūüė¶ The percentage of Australians holding a maths, science, or computing degree raised quite significantly from 10 to 18.

It’s an easy mistake to make. There are 2 verbs with similar meanings. One is transitive (must have an object), the other intransitive (no object).

In your example you use ‘to raise‘, as in ‘raise the titanic’ (V2: raised). However, you have no object, and so what you need is¬†‘to rise‘ (V2: rose):

ūüôā The percentage of Australians holding a maths, science, or computing degree¬†rose¬†quite significantly from 10 to 18.

Let me try to make a sentence using ‘to raise’:

ūüôā A combination of improved¬†teaching methods,¬†widespread¬†availability of courses, student interest and governmental commitment¬†raised the percentage of Australians holding a maths, science, or computing degree¬†quite significantly from 10 to 18.

Possibly you were looking for a synonym for ‘to increase’ in the hope of avoiding repetition. OK, well the synonym is ‘to rise’. But¬†‘increase’ is a very effective word in Task 1 writing. To avoid repetition, use ‘increase’ both as a verb and as a noun:

  • The percentage of¬†Australians holding technical degrees increased.
  • At the same time¬†there was an increase in the percentage of women joining the¬†¬†Australian workforce.

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